Constructive criticism?

2024.11.30 02:50 BaleMountainsAdder Constructive criticism?

I want to write something, it doesn't have to have a time limit. I just want to be creative. Here it is:
CHAPTER 1
“Wake up Little Fairy, it’s the big day!”
I woke up, lying down on soft grass, head aching with pulses of pain.
Where the hell am I?
My head cleared of the cobwebs of unconsciousness. The pain permeated my body, horrible and potent. Well, that was the end of my question. I let out a groan of suffering, it was coming from my left shoulder.
My ears heard voices but my brain didn’t listen to them, why would it? It had far more important things to do, namely, making sure I didn’t make any more weird noises.
I opened my eyes to at once be blinded, the sun scorching them. But a few seconds later a shape blocked it out. I couldn’t see them properly because my gaze was still blurry, also because the sun was right behind the mystery person; turning them into an outline.
More shapes crowded my vision. Too close. They were too close.
“Give her space,” A commanding voice spoke with such authority that I tried to sit up and back away.
Well, that didn’t help at all. I fell back down with a startled gasp of pain.
All the shapes retreated from me, and I chose to believe they were human, I don’t think my head would survive anymore confusion right now. A slightly taller shape came into view, not as close as the ones before, so it didn’t block the sun. “Can you talk?” it said.
Surprising myself, I managed to get out a ragged, “Yes.” My eyes still wouldn’t focus on anything besides trying to see something that wasn’t the sun.
“Then get up,”
I blinked, slightly surprised by their bluntness. The shock finally cleared my head. I obliged, I knew not moving just made it harder for everyone, despite the pain.
My arm was hurting like hell so, I decided to use my other arm (wow, who would have thought of that). I used my un-wounded arm to push myself up. But my god did it hurt.
“That’s it, you got this” the person was helping me up now, careful to not touch my hurt arm. I could now tell she was a woman, and despite the gentleness that now lightly laced her tone, that didn’t make them any less intimidating.
I was on my knees now, and I could finally see properly. I was in a field; the grass was so green it hurt. I finally looked at my arm. Oh my god… there was a giant gash along my left shoulder, and my entire arm and part of my shirt was soaked in blood, how I wasn’t writhing in pain on the grass… I don’t know- ah, yes, adrenaline. I think I might have a new favorite thing.
I tore my gaze from my ruined arm to the woman who was helping me, she had black skin and a stern face, with dark brown eyes. The woman was wearing a uniform, like what you would see on a commanding general, and she had medals on her lapel too. She hauled me to my feet and kept me upright with a hand around my waist. “What’s your name?” the woman asked.
It took a second for me to respond because I was too busy looking at the other people gathered around us, they were all fascinating, the weirdest combo of features, one I think was the first person I saw had silver hair and amber eyes.
“Fern-“ was all I got out before falling into a coughing fit. “OK Fern, I’m General Nord. Where did you come from?” I ignored the name situation and thought about where I had been before waking up, but there was nothing, no memory of family or a home, my entire memory was just blank. My eyes widened, “I-I don’t remember, I don’t remember anything,” I was starting to panic.
And then, because the universe had “perfect” timing, I promptly passed out.
What do you guys think?
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2024.11.30 02:50 Prior-Hat-8110 Giving out 6 Microsoft/Minecraft accounts

Bought some alts over the years and I don't need them anymore. Message me on Discord.
- jetjoshspiky
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2024.11.30 02:50 Zombiw [Request] Just got new job on the other side of the country, I don't get paid until Dec 6th

The only thing near me within walking distance is a Taco Bell at the moment, any help would be greatly appreciated.
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2024.11.30 02:50 GuapoSayas Moritz Wagner and Julius Randle sold us. 22 out of 24 hit smh

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2024.11.30 02:50 peterinjapan Question about fixing a Mac Mini switch wire

Question about fixing a Mac Mini switch wire Hello guys. I’m taking a spare M2 Mac mini, and putting it inside a G4 cube, and I ran into a problem. The wire that moves from the motherboard to the switch broke, and I need to repair it, or find some kind of other switch. My question is, does anyone know what kind of wire will be inside ? I assume it has to be two different wires at least, obviously very small, and I can melt the casing and hopefully repair the wires. Has anyone ever worked with this wire? Do you have any ideas about what other kind of switch I could hook up? The switch wire will go through a hole in the back of the G4 cube so I can turn the machine on.
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2024.11.30 02:50 CassandraGlimmer Here's a picture of my gorgeous one eyed Jack Russel, have a nice day!

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2024.11.30 02:50 irishspice There can never be enough Guy

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2024.11.30 02:50 Historical_Bee6588 Cam Newton only in rush packs ?

Is he in every pack or just the rush packs? also i saw Diggs is out of packs at 10pm tonight, is Cam out with him too or ?
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2024.11.30 02:50 UnfoundedFox- oke but why are they remaking lilo & bitch

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2024.11.30 02:50 Urge2Splurge678 is this fire 🔥 also give me recommendations

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2024.11.30 02:50 J-Midori Marry You [Episodes 5 & 6]

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2024.11.30 02:50 Retoucherny Speakers to pair with NAD c3050 and project debut carbon w/moonstone

Which speakers for $1000? 1500? A steal at $500?
Probably prefer new, but I could be convinced otherwise.
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2024.11.30 02:50 ScarlettStrawberry LF Gotcha!

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2024.11.30 02:50 -Rick-Prime- انا مش عارف مين محتاج يسمع الكلام ده بس:

امبارح كنت عامل بوست لو حد فاضي يرغي، و كلمني شاب في اوائل العشرينات و من كلامه و حكاويه حسيت بكمية الحزن اللي عنده و مشاكله مع نفسه و مع نظرته لنفسه من خلال الناس اللي حواليه و عدم ثقته في نفسه وكل يومين بشوف زيه كتير هنا.
اتضايقت من اللي حكاه و نظرته لنفسه، و شايف ان ديه مش طريقة تعيش بيها احسن مدة زمنية في حياتك، و اه انا جايلك من المستقبل و بقولك العشرينات احسن وقت في حياتك.
لو انت زيه، اه انت الشاب الراجل اللي بتروح جامعتك كل يوم و بتحاول تحسن مستواك و تدرس و تتفشخ، و بتنزل تشتغل مع الدراسة عشان تجيب هم مصاريفك او مصاريف دراستك، او علي الاقل مواصلاتك
وانت اللي دايما شايل هم اهلك و خايف عليهم و شايل مسؤولية و ساكت، و بتحاول تساعد علي قد ما تقدر و بتبهدل في مواصلات رايح و راجع و بتفكر هتعمل ايه لنفسك قدام و تقعد تحلم بحاجات نفسك توصلها، و دايما مهما كان يومك مقرف و حزين برضو بتحافظ علي ابتسامتك و تضحك و تضحك اللي حواليكو تكتم جواك حزنك عشان عارف انك متقدرش تبين عشان بس ماتشغلش بال حد عليك وعارف ان محدش هيسيب اللي في ايده و يسمع مشاكلك غير نفسك.
انت اللي بتحاول دايما تساعد و تبقي جدع للي يحتاجلك و بتعاني بس في صمت و بتحترم الصغير و الكبير وانت اللي طول عمرك جنتل مع الناس ، و دايما بتسعي بس برضو كل حاجة صعبةو مع ذلك انت ما نسيتش مسؤولياتك.
يعني عايز بس اقولك ان:
-انت قيمتك مش بتستمدها من نظرة الناس ليك. -انت قيمتك مش من الصحاب اللي سابوك. -انت قيمتك مش في اللبس اللي انت مش عارف تشتريه. -انت قيمتك مش من البنت اللي رفضتك. -انت قيمتك مش من المكان اللي انت معاكش تقعد فيه. -انت قيمتك مش في شكلك اللي مش عاجبك. -انت قيمتك مش من الراحة اللي انت مش عارف ترتاحها.
انت اه مش اغني واحد ولا اذكي و لا اوسم واحد ولا اكتر واحد دمه خفيف …. بس افتكر انك انت طول عمرك كنت اكتر من اللي الناس التانية شايفاه ، و دايما بتحاول ليك ولغيرك و ساكت و ده المقياس الحقيقي ليك و وقت لما هتعرف قيمتك ديه كل حاجة في حياتك هتتحسن.
You have always been more than what others saw… and remembering this will always push you forward.
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2024.11.30 02:50 Affectionate-Diet451 So if mesha never got a room what she doing with the money she did scam. Smh why not use that to buy a jacket. Oh thats right she bought liquor and alcohol.

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2024.11.30 02:50 Danidaivido RSD SUCCESS 🥳

RSD SUCCESS 🥳 I
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2024.11.30 02:50 Emergency_Detail_353 [Tech Help] Can't get out of guest account to reroll. Google Play on PC; tried clearing cache in game, resetting Google Ads ID. But it's still on the same guest.

Any ideas on how to get out the guest account in order to reroll? I'm using Google Play via PC. I tried clearing the cache using the button that shows up on the upper left when the game first starts and it ended up redownloading everything but still under the guest account. I also tried changing the google ad ID.
I have an android device if there's a way to get out of a guest account from there.
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2024.11.30 02:50 OvernightSiren The original is "summer". Caroline's is "autumn". Which artists would you entrust for a Winter and Spring version of "Everything is Romantic"?

IMO I think the obvious choice for a Spring remix of "Everything is Romantic" would be Carly Rae Jepsen.
As far as a winter remix, I'm honestly not sure.
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2024.11.30 02:50 KoKeNo HVB replacement.

HVB replacement. ‘23 MY (16k miles) was acting funny few days prior to getting a HVB needing service message. I noticed the range was noticeably low and twice the car would go into drive? Went into the service menu which states HBV needs replacement. Super bummer. Staying positive since it’s covered under warranty. But I was wondering if anything I did could have caused this. I strictly charge level 2 at home.
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2024.11.30 02:50 Apprehensive_Win3134 Sinner's Paradise

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2024.11.30 02:50 ReleaseFabulous5329 What u think how they look ?

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2024.11.30 02:50 Lanareysservant Every mf in here who comes here just to meme gotta fucking leave

Yall retards dont even fuck with carti then yall go ahead and post shit like "Im playboying my carti lmaooo" "my parents are divorcing hahahah" "Fein Fein Fein Fein lmaooo" Ts is not fucking funny why yall not just stick to fucking kendricklamar or tylerthecreator fuck off right now all yall little fucking sluts cus yall not fucking funny and yall be creating a annoying ass echo chamber within the sub full of retards.
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2024.11.30 02:50 JumpApprehensive7937 Unexpected gift. 🎁

Unexpected gift. 🎁 I went with my wife to NM to pick up some shoes for her & we ended up drifting to the creed boutique. I sampled the new triple aged batch & as soon as my wife got a sniff of it, she was committed on purchasing it.
The other scent that she purchased me on the spot was BTV 1907, she definitely likes quality scents.
I also have the OG Absolu Aventus, both have the same opening, the dry down is very different. I recommend to anyone that’s looking for it, to get it. I get a strong pineapple accord on the dry down. The OG is much sweeter & woody.
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2024.11.30 02:50 johnvitor Some RG Cube 1:1 AR Codes

Hi everyone, I created this post to share with us some AR Codes I created to play on 1:1 screen of RG Cube
Remember to deactivate "WideScreen Hack" and chose Fit to screen on menu
Super Mario Sunshine (GMSE01): 04416B74 3F238EF3
Zelda Wind Waker (GZLE01): 043FA998 3F800000
Zelda Twilight Princess (GZ2E01): 0445391C 3F800000
How I got this codes? Simply, I get code from here:
https://forums.dolphin-emu.org/Thread-gc-ar-codes-for-16-9-21-9-60hz
And did a linear regression
Example: Zelda WW
16:9 - 043FA998 3FE38E39
21:9 (2560x1080) - 043FA998 4017B426
The first value is the memory address, and the second value is the camera ratio/fov (idk)
Converting the second value to float:
16:9 - 3FE38E39 = 1.78
21:9 - 4017B426 = 2.37
Doing a linear regression:
1:1 = 1 = 3F800000
Ar Code: 043FA998 3F800000
All credits of the following post:
https://www.reddit.com/SBCGaming/comments/1dn81c9/psa_for_anbernic_rg_cube_dolphin_mmjr2_supports/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button
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2024.11.30 02:50 PodcastDelivery The Circuit with Emily Chang

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